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Need help fixing these revisions. Here are the comments: The second problem is the undeveloped relation between New Criticism and Cultural Studies. The sociological orientation of the latter is generally considered a repudiation of the formalism of the former.  Why did you select New Criticism as a topic?  Finally, there are factual errors.  Flaubert died well before Leavis and thus could not have been influenced by him.  I am wondering where you read this mistake.  In its current form, the paper presents too many ideas in too cursory a fashion.  My suggestion is that you reduce the number of thinkers you mention, concentrate on one or two, and employ their ideas in a detailed fashion to analyze a cultural object or phenomenon.  In sum, much more close analysis and unpacking of theories and examples will be needed to write a strong paper. 
Here was the original prompt: 4,000-word research paper on a topic of your own choosing. Your paper should clearly demonstrate engagement with at least one theoretical methodology of your choice. You can write entirely about a theory and explore its dimensions (historical, philosophical, aesthetic) or write an analysis of an object informed by a specific theory. You are encouraged to relate cultural analysis to historical, artistic, intellectual, social, national, political, and economic contexts. Please demonstrate to me in your paper that you have conducted research and thought deeply about cultural analysis. To complete this assignment well, you should begin your research now. Your paper should cite at least 4-6 sources (preferably books or articles). A strong essay will contain at least 15 notes (in any style of your choosing).