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Write a Final draft of the Internet Research essay. I upload my second draft below. Here is the comments from professor, please revise the essay based on these comments. “You need a more compelling title than just an announcement of the topic.Please add context to this argument. Which government and which people are you discussing? Is this the U.S.? Later in the essay you write “Although the government made vaccination mandatory,” and that’s not true here in the U.S., so you must be discussing somewhere else, but it’s not clear where. And here you write, “but in the case of the Covid- 19 vaccine, it is expensive and only available in few health organizations”, but here it’s free and fairly easy to find at this point. I’m confused.You write that the pandemic has “been in existence for close to three years now”, but my understanding is that the earliest cases were perhaps in October or November of 2019. Do you have research that puts the early cases in 2018? You also claim that “the pandemic has not met the documented tests of the vaccine’s effectiveness; hence, most of the vaccines have been rolled out due to being ineffective.” But there’s a ton of evidence that many of the vaccines are HIGHLY effective and are being rolled out more and more across the globe. This really confused me.The central thesis (proposal) is clear and well-stated at the end of the first paragraph.Statements like this require evidence: “there is no sufficient research that has been done to reveal that the risks associated with vaccination outweigh the risks of infections without the vaccine.” Because you are not an infectious disease expert, you need to research and find out what the experts are saying and see if they agree with you.I think the biggest piece for me here is that you claim that the government must not infringe on people’s liberty by mandating a vaccine, but there’s no part of your essay that goes deeply into this question. I think most reasonable people agree that the government shouldn’t send a pack of thugs to your house to force an injection in your arm. Ok, but what about schools mandating vaccination against polio, measles, etc. in order to protect the other children, some of whom cannot medically tolerate a vaccination? And what if the government declares that unvaccinated people cannot fly on an airplane or gather at a large indoor event? Is this the same as making something mandatory? Please define “mandatory” and make it clear how far you think the government should go in the interest of public health.”