solved I’m working on a english question and need a sample

I’m working on a english question and need a sample draft to help me understand better.

response 1- After reviewing my essay, I did notice a couple of fallacies. Circular reason, this was an unintentional fallacies that probably killed my argument. In my essay I wrote that I think some people are born homosexual. I mentioned a family member who was very feminine from a very young age, trying to make it seem that because of his ways growing up, it makes it a fact that you can be born a homosexual. When in fact, there is no proven fact that you can or cannot be born that way. I think that fallacies alone killed my argument but there was another I noticed, but this was unintentional one,  Appeal to emotions. In my essay I tried to persuade by saying that we should never judge or look at anyone any different because we do not know if in the future any of your children will be in a relationship with someone of the same sex. Looking back, I can see that I was trying to persuade the reader by using a Karma tactic and making them feel bad if they don’t accept people the way they are.
response 2- After reviewing my essay, I compared it to what I watched and learned from this previous video. My article was talking about advice given to my friend who cannot express what is inside. I found that there are some logical fallacies. First of all, I had circular reasoning, meaning that I was rewriting the argument rather than proving it. Frequent sentences were looking for one meaning to express what was inside of us while neglecting how to do it or explaining it. My friend, for example, was my response to all his oppositions in general, which I drew in my imagination about his behavior, which is running away and ashamed of confrontation. The majority of the paragraphs of my article were talking about a mistake in my friend without explaining and without looking into his reasons for doing so. In the end, I learned from this new lesson how to modify the argument to be more convincing while creating a common ground for the argument.